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Fic: "Scaled" -- my Adama/Roslin Dradis 499 entry! 
7th-Sep-2005 09:43 pm
Though that should actually be my Adama/Roslin Dradis 499 winner!!! Even if it is actually 540 words. *glees* I don't have my banner yet, but the story is up at the Dradis BSG fan fiction site.

Judy B. said the following about my story: "Very good story, subtle yet strong. We liked it very much."

Translation--no smut. But the more I re-read it, the more I see how easily I could expand it to include some ... ;^)

It'd be a heckuva lot more than 540 words then!

ETA: I got my banner! Check the Pretty! Guess I need to set up my bio so I have someplace to put it ...

I want to give a big shout-out first and formost to kimbari, who inspired me to enter with her winning entry of last week, "No One". I should also thank every obsessive fan who insisted on asking, "But how did they get out of the toooooommmb?!" after seeing "Home part 2".


by Karihan

Rating: PG
Spoilers: Home part 2

"So ... how do we get out of here?"

Leave it to Billy to ask the practical question that yanks the rest of us out of our dazed amazement with the Tomb of Athena.

We look around. There are only the twelve standing stones and the starlit plains beyond.

Bill Adama turns to me. "The scriptures helped us enter the Tomb, Madam President. Do they have any helpful suggestions for leaving it?"

My voice is steady despite my unease. "I'm afraid they neglected that detail, Commander."

"Then the answer must be here somewhere." He scans the stones again, then nods sharply. "Right. Lee, you and Kara search the half of the circle from Scorpio to Aries. The President and I will search from Libra to Taurus. Mr. Keikeya-" Billy blinks at this address. "-you stand in the center and maintain visual contact on both teams."

As our companions move off, Bill and I approach the Libra stone. He sighs in exasperation. "Wish I had some idea of what to look for."

"Wait. What's this?" Another jewel, small and unlit, is set into the stone. As I reach curious fingers toward it, Bill lays a forestalling hand on my arm. "Laura, d-"

The jewel flares at my touch. The circle vanishes.

Darkness resolves into two pools of light. I stand in one, Bill in the other. We are clothed only in the light, but neither this nor our strange translocation disturbs the calm. There is no fear here. We await ... something.

The light intensifies and pours through us both, dazzling without blinding, blazing without burning. A sussuration of wind, waves and voices surrounds us. The sound gradually resolves, not into words, but into meaning.




The light releases us.

"-on't ..." Bill pulls my hand from the jewel in the Libra stone.

One look into each other's eyes confirms the reality, or at least the mutuality, of our experience.

"Laura, what the hell was that?" Hardened realist that he is, Bill sounds uneasy.

I look at the symbol above us. "Libra, the Scales." I swallow. "Perhaps we were being ... measured."

"By whom? Or what?"

"Well, that is the question, isn't it?" I find myself smiling for no apparent reason. "Whoever it was, I don't think we were found wanting."

He looks distinctly unreassured.

"Over here! I think we found it!"

Apollo waves for us to join him and Starbuck on the other side of the Sagittarius stone. As we approach, Bill jerks his head at the two pilots and raises his eyebrows. Do we say anything?

I shake my head, no. He nods agreement.

Another collection of jewels, this one in the shape of an arrow, adorns the far side of this monolith. An unlit jewel sits below.

As the Archer was our entrance to the Tomb, so he also becomes our exit.

Much later, after many explanations to everyone who waited outside, Bill takes me aside to talk. "Measured."

"I think so."

His brow furrows. "So that last word, Balance ... is that something we have, something we've found here on Kobol, or something we have to search for?"

I think carefully before giving my answer.


8th-Sep-2005 03:20 am (UTC)

:: sighing ::

bumber samich for Kari!
9th-Sep-2005 04:55 am (UTC)
Well, thank you, Kia!

*peeks between the slices of bread to see what the "bumber" in the "samich" might be.* ^_^
8th-Sep-2005 03:32 am (UTC)
Bumber samich?

*shakes head vigorously*

Serves me right for reading someone else's comments. (WTF is a bumber samich?)


This was wonderful. "Scaled" For some reason, I was thinking of cleaning a fish. Oh, well, food's always on my mind. Then when you got to Libra... and after and I'm like duh. (Not firing on all thrusters, Lt.)

ANYWAY, I'm rambling like a mother but this was excellent! *squee* Not an old secret but a new secret. (And hopefully the folks on that site have learned their lesson about editing stories without the author's permission. :D)

9th-Sep-2005 05:02 am (UTC)
"Scaled" For some reason, I was thinking of cleaning a fish.

I chose "Scaled" for the title after thinking of the many meanings for/uses of the word. Of course, the most obvious in terms of this story connects with Libra, with being weighed or measured. But the verb also refers to climbing or ascending, and scaling a fish certainly implies the removal of an outer protective layer.

So you were right with all your thoughts. ;^)
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9th-Sep-2005 05:09 am (UTC)
*chuckle* Yeah, I had to pare my usual verbiage waaaay down for this one! Sounds like it was still effective.

I did say smut. But if I put smut in, I can guarantee that simple language will go out the window. ^_^
8th-Sep-2005 04:22 am (UTC)
interesting story....and well done on wining!!!
9th-Sep-2005 05:11 am (UTC)
Thank you, Dee! Winning has indeed been a buzz. I just need to get my spiffy banner up someplace!
8th-Sep-2005 04:58 am (UTC)
Oooooh, nice! That's really a great solution to their problem of getting out of their tomb. And I love the whole balanced thing. It's great. :D I love your writing.
9th-Sep-2005 05:20 am (UTC)
Thank you, Alana! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I've been toying with writing a "director's cut" of this story (namely, what I would have written if I wasn't held to a word limit) to be posted to adama_roslin, but that may need to wait a while. Can't hold off "Gods' Gift" part 6 indefinitely!
8th-Sep-2005 12:24 pm (UTC)
ooh, that's nice! I love the concept. I wonder if all the other stones have jewells on them and what they might say. This certainly deserves a followup *G*
9th-Sep-2005 05:23 am (UTC)
Oh, gosh ... I've wondered that myself, but I'd have to do some research into the Zodiac if I were going to write it! Which doesn't rule it out, of course. ^_^
9th-Sep-2005 12:27 am (UTC)
I really enjoyed this story. I can't wait for more.
9th-Sep-2005 05:25 am (UTC)
Thanks, Mary! *HUGS* SuperMuse is still very much on my ... case, so more of SOMETHING should be forthcoming in a little while. (^;
9th-Sep-2005 01:15 am (UTC)
Awwww...I totally see/feel/dig the idea of balance when it comes to "Laura" and "Bill" (hee). Really nice work!

So...they were clothed only in light. Yeah, I dig that too. :P
9th-Sep-2005 05:32 am (UTC)
Hee ... I think that balance is what they've sought between them all along (among other things ;). We'll see if they can maintain it in tomorrow night's ep!

So...they were clothed only in light. Yeah, I dig that too.

Did I mention how easy it would be to incorporate smut? ;^9
9th-Sep-2005 02:06 am (UTC)
Ooooooh, that was insanely cool, Chris!
9th-Sep-2005 05:34 am (UTC)
*^_^* Thank you! Short though it was, this was actually a very difficult piece to write. I'm so glad it went over so well!
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